This piece of writing had the most impact on me than any other assignment I have ever had. I have never gotten raw information before like that. It amazed me how attached I got in each interview. The mixture of trying to keep it like a everyday normal conversation and trying to get information to include in my research. Now for my peer review, with the 32 sections that I could be graded on the average score for this paper was a 5. 1. It was by far my best writing and one of the main reasons I included it.
My strongest category was “The question, problem, or issue is focused and significant, and it remains clearly important throughout the essay”. My average score was actually a 6. To me that is impressive, no reader I had was ever confused at any point of how significant my issue was in my essay. My worst score was a 3. 9 and it came in the “Varied kinds of evidence (including sources,studies,original research, anecdotes, observation,personal experience, statistics, visual elements, etc. promote understanding of the writers argument and help the reader connect. ” The reason I feel like this was my lowest score was because I interviewed people and besides a couple fact in the introduction it was mostly personal stories that were my bulk of my ideas. Looking back I could have included a lot more information with side data to show more specific commonalities between a certain girl and the thousands of other girls that have gone through the exact same thing. This was my strongest paper all year and my peer reviews showed it.
I also got high remarks from the professor. Alcohol was the common factor in all of these situations. In one research, it said that 55% of sexual assaults the women remember consuming alcohol and 74% of the perpetrators had consumed alcohol (118). To me, that is where the problem starts. There are bad people in the world, and an effort to convince bad people to stop doing horrific things would be worthless. They are going to do it either way no matter how they are educated.
The thing you can do is give women the warning signs that they might be in a situation where they could be in danger. There are attempts at that at Washington State University. We have a green dot program that educates all incoming students to WSU about what may happen and how to hopefully prevent it. The thing is me and other students that go to those are just there to fulfill the requirements. The young women I know that experienced sexual assault is an experience for most that will scar them for life.
In the end, all you can do is educate. One of my favorite quotes of all time is “Those who do not learn from history are doomed to repeat it. ” We have the history and track records of what allows sexual assault and rape to prosper. Now we need to work to make those situations less frequent. Education of red flags for women need to be made clear, and an attempt to get through to the men that commit these crimes to say this is not okay, and it will never be.
